I found a website that has information in the history of the Domra http://home.att.net/~domra_mandolin/Domra.htm Then add a new paragraph call history of the Domra

Hey Guys,

Overall, I really enjoyed reading your page. You've got a solid amount of information that is coupled with good links and nice formatting. There are a few words and phrases that I think you may have been able to put into "kid friendly" language, but not enough to make me all that worried.

After looking through your history, I also think that the work done on your page was relatively balanced as well. Thanks for all contributing.

Mr. F

Hey, I like your content and your bubbleshar e, (althoughgh it is a little peretitive, Domra, Domra, Lady holding a Domra, Domra...)Your last paragraph however,

Most Russians loved the domra. The domra was like a guitar or a piano to us. This intrument played the most beautiful folk music in all of Russia. However there is one person in Russia that made a big impact that loved the Domra. Josef Stalin, who was an evil dictator of Russia and was a big fan of the domra.

doesnt 100% make sence. Are you talking from the point of you, or a russian citizen? Arent you being alittle bias when you say everybody loved the Domra? Maybe you should reveiw this paragraph and make it from your point of veiw and stay on topic, (Joseph stalin part didnt make too much sense!!) Maybe you could also add some links. Really good content.
Kathleen
p.s. There was a balalaika at the Russian dance preformance, so I liked how you included that!

Great job you guys!! I think you did very well on this. You did good on the bubbleshare. You also had great content and good formatting. Some of it kind of looked like it was copied and pasted which probobly could of had some tweaking. Overall I think you guys deserve a 91. Great work.

Hey guys you have a good page and good content. Your links go to a different places which is really good. But you repeat a lot of information in the paragraph and each time it is different. It sounds like you couldn't find anything on Domra. I think you deserve a 84.

I would give it a 2 or 3. This is because you could have had a little more detail and explained a little more too. You also could have had more links because it was a little confusing in some spots. Buty overall (on the grading scale), I think you guys deserve an 89 because you had some good content and your links went to different places. Very Good Job Guys!!!

You had a fair amount of content on your page which was great. I liked the internal links that go to Joesph Stalins page. Overall I think you deserve between and 83-85.

Overall, pretty good, but you could have added more to the WHY THE DOMRA IS LOVED part or just take it out. Based on the info you must not have found much on the Domra. i wouldf give you an 87 or 88. Good job.

If I were to grade your page I'd say it would deserve a B. You're page had an adequate amount of links and definately was in kid friendly language. However only 1/12 of your links were internal links. In order to have a stronger page I would advise adding more. Also I belive your page could greatly improve by having a better word choice. Some of your writing is too informal for a wiki.

Your links were mostly external and, like Kristen C. said, you could use a few more internal links. I looked in your table of contents to see where to go to find out how it relates to Russia and there was no subheading that I could go to. Some +'s are that your bubbleshare has interesting pictures, but you kind of repeated your pictures, and your content was reasonably interesting. Some of the sections could use a bit more info and some polishing up with word choice, grammar, and spelling.

I think your page was pretty good. I really liked how all of your links were to totaly different places. I liked your facts but I don't think you had enough. Out of 100 i give you a 84%

I think your page was pretty good but in some places you could use more content in some places. I really liked where your links went and overall i think you deserve an 84%

Good job. I like all of your links. goog job with only having 1 link to wikipeda. you have good content. Ilike werer you put your bubble share. i think that you would deserive an 90-92

I definately learned something about the domra. You had lots of information, and all of your paragraphs were very focused, if I were grading you on focus, I would give you a 98, with my one problem being the bubbleshare. You could replace the bubbleshare with a picture or two, and then your focus would be perfect.

Some problems that I found with this page was that you indented your paragraphs, which isn't common or usual on the intranet. Also, I found about ten grammer mistakes, which takes away from the overall value of the page. One more problem was that you didn't acually ever come out and say "the way/reason that the domra is related to Russia is because" and then the reason. The last problem that I found about this page is that you repeated some information about five times and that takes away from the acual amount of information on the page.

Some good thigs that I found about this page were that as I said before, you were very focused except for the bubbleshare. Also, you had the paragraphs in totally kid-friendly language with lots of informative links, but some of the links were about the same thing, like you linked balalaikas 2 or 3 times, whereas you only needed to link it once.

Overall I would give you about a 80-85, on the criteria listed above.

I learned somthing from the Domra page but I would like to learn more from the page so if you guys would put up mpre content I could learn more. Also if you put up some links then readers could learn even more about Domras.

Hey guys, well you could use more pictures, links, and information. It seemed like you might be repeating yourself too much. I am not saying it is really bad i'm just saying it's averge like you only worked on it 3 or 4 days out of the 2 week. I mean some of this information is really intersting and i learned what a Domra is so it not bad.

Hey guys great job. your have good content on your page.You could add more content to make it better.You could also add more links. Some things your could inprove is you could put explanations of your pictures.over all it was an good page.
MichelleF

good job guys exept i was scrolling down and i expected alot more but the scroll stoped and there was no more content. if i were u i would add some more content

Good detail it was pretty fun to read. It was kinda short and i would have to go with patrick "if i were you i would add some more content" you should add sme more detail. I would give this a 86 or a 3.

Wow! I noticed you had a lot of meaningful content, I learned a ton! An issue I see is that there weren't many pictures besides the Bubbleshare. I also realized in the "What it is Used For" subtitle there was a run on sentence. If I were you, I would either add a period, or a semi colon. I wonder if that instrument was used in the assembly? I think it was. Overall, I think you did a really good job content wise I would give it a 4 on a scale of 1-5!
-Abbey W.